It’s five syllables
And then another seven
So it’s haiku, right?
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Not so fast, I say
It is not quite that simple
Shut up and listen
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Japanese has sounds
They’re shorter than syllables
English sounds clunky
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Japan loves nature
Haiku reflects that deep love
Nintendo it ain’t
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As a young student
My teacher said “yours is good”
No discouragement
***
My count was correct
And I was very happy
A big achievement!
***
It’s a good idea
To know what you are doing
When you write a poem
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Or else the result
Is pure horse manure that smells,
Attracting the flies
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(Did you just see that?
That haiku had nature but
No essence of life)
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I am not a poet
My haikus are really bad
But that’s on purpose
***
I am not stupid
Art’s not a formula like
The five-seven-five
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I dislike haikus…. they just leave me dissatisfied. Rather like eating at McDonalds or Burger King. Lots of Coke and not enough actual food. (I do not eat at either, unless I’m on a highway and there’s nothing else in sight for miles and miles)
If people were writing haikus according to the Japanese form, they’d be a lot better. Much of the poetry written as “haiku” is a cheap imitation.
I love a good haiku, nothing cheap or fast about it. Liked the manure one and the one after it the best. Made me laugh.
Thanks!
My pleasure.
Hi. It’s a good try. Haikus are too difficult to write rather than a long story where you can put in all your emotinal verse. I liked your haikus because they’re expressed the reality of the will to do better haikus – or something else.
Thanks.
I actually do like going into poetic form on occasion. It’s just a matter of what works for the day’s topic.
A very amusing series of haiku to illustrate your point, bumblepuppies! I got into haiku about four or five years ago and have been reading/writing/studying the form ever since. I think it changes the way you look at the world, but I also think no haiku is better than bad haiku. 🙂
Thanks.
Since you mentioned being experienced with the form, I took a quick stop by your blog. It’s good to see some haiku in English that dispenses with the 5-7-5 in favor of some lines with fewer syllables. I think that gets closer to the essence of what haiku is supposed to be.
Funny, I haven’t posted on my blog since the summer as things have been a bit hectic (I know, I know, that’s no excuse!) and I’ve just published a post on haiga! 🙂
Thanks for visiting my blog. It’s more to shame me into painting and writing really and I think the handful of people that follow me do so because they know I post so rarely that I won’t be annoying them too often! Totally not what a blog supposed to be like, I know.
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